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 高考英语作文:吸引阅卷老师那些高分词

  在高考作文阅卷过程中,老师会对一些“高级”词汇尤为偏爱。但是,大多数同学根本不具备单词升级意识,一想到“好”,就是“good”;一想到“坏”,就是“bad”;一想到“美丽”就是“beautiful”。当老师一天批阅上千份“内容相同、语言低龄”的作文时,她的痛苦感受可想而知。

  因此,你一定要避免这些“低能词汇”,让自己的词汇升级、升级再升级!

  那么,什么样的单词最能够吸引阅卷老师的好感?

  我们在分析大量高分、满分作文后发现,能够吸引阅卷老师好感的单词满足 四 大原则:

  【原则一:晚词优先】

  老师偏爱“学得晚”的单词,因为使用学得比较晚的单词,可以体现一个人“学以致用”的意识。如果一个意思既可以用初中单词来表达,又可以用高二、高三单词来表达,那尽量选择高二、高三的单词,如:

 (1 )Adj. 困难的

  黯然低分词:difficult

  闪光高分词:challenging 有挑战性的

  (2 )Adj. 重要的

 黯然低分词:important 闪光高分词:vital 至关重要的;essential 必不 可少的;significant 有重要意义的;

  (3 )Adj. 美丽的

 黯然低分词:beautiful

  闪光高分词:appealing 动人的;attractive 吸引人的;charming 迷人的;fascinating 迷人的

  注:以上五个词既能修饰人,又能修饰物,非常好用,务必记熟!

  【原则二:短语优先】

  在阅卷老师看来,活用短语是一个考生能力的体现。因此,我们可以掌握一些将某些常见单词转化为短语的用法,如:

  (4 )v. 参加

 黯然低分词:join

 闪光高分词:take part in

  (5 )v. 使用

  黯然低分词:use

  闪光高分词:make good use of

  (6 )v. 拜访

 黯然低分词:visit

  闪光高分词:pay a visit to

  (7 )最常见的换词手段:形容词=of+ 同根名词 黯然低分词:

 闪光高分词:

 very important 重要的 of great importance very difficult 困难的 of great difficulty very beautiful 美丽的 of great beauty very useful 有用的 of great use very helpful 有帮助的 of great help very harmful 有害的 of great harm very valuable 有价值的 of great value very significant 至关重要的 of great significance very necessary 必要的 of great necessity

 【原 则三:“ 具体化” 单词优先】

  请先对比以下几组句子:

  【例句 1】I go to school everyday.

  【例句 2】I ride to school everyday.

  在课堂上,笔者经常以这两个句子为例,讲解“具体化”的重要性。很多同学都能感觉到例句 2 要比例句 1 好。究其原因,是例句 2 中的 rode 比例句 1中的 went 更加具体:went 只表达了“去”的意思,而 rode不但表达出“去”的意思,还能表达出具体的交通方式。也就是说,例句2 表达的信息量比例句 1更加丰富。

 再如:

  【例句 3】Mr Wang is a good teacher.

  【例句 4】Mr Wang is a kind, patient and knowledgeable teacher.

 例句 3只表达出 Mr Wang 是一个“好”老师,而到底“好”在哪些方面,却没有具体说清楚;例句 4 则清楚地告诉读者,Mr Wang 好在三个方面:和蔼(kind)、耐心(patient)以及知识丰富(knowledgeable)。

  因此,我们必须学会换用更为具体的单词表达我们的思想,如:

  (8 )adj. 学习

 黯然低分词:learn

  闪光高分词:research 研究;pick up 偶然学到,顺便学到,轻松学到;master 掌握

  (9 )n. 好老师

  黯然低分词:a good teacher

  闪光高分词:a kind, patient and knowledgeable English teacher 一个善良、耐心、博学的老师

  当然,除了替换某些表意抽象的单词,我们还可以通过增加细节成分,使表达更为具体,如,例句 2可以加上同伴、心情等信息,进一步改写成:

  【例句 5】I,together with Tom and Jerry, rode to the Zhongshan park yesterday,feeling rather excited.

  同样的,例句 4 也可以加上一个定语从句,写出 Mr Wang 到底擅长哪些事情,如:

  【例句 6】Mr Wang is a kind, patient and knowledgeable teacher who knows how to enlighten us students.

  可以看到,例句 5和例句 6 两个句子采用“具体化”的手段,将原本毫无生气的句子顿时变得生动形象了。

  综上所述,想让你的表达“具体化”,一共有两种常用方法, 其一,是换掉某些表意不明确的单词,换上表意更加明确具体的单词; 其二,是在句中适当增加细节成分。“具体化”的好处,是让句子的含义更加丰富,让读者更容易由句子展开丰富的联想,随着作者一起经历、一起思考、一起感动。在平时的学习、训练中,与其生硬地使用超纲词汇,不如好好熟悉大纲单词,用好“具体化”的两种方法,为你的作文增光添彩。

  事实上,“具体化”在汉语写作中也有同样的体现。比如,要表达“惜别”的感情,光说“再见”是不够的,应该像诗人那样,用具体化的细节带动感情,写出梦幻般的文字:“让我与你握别/再轻轻抽出我的手/ 知道思念从此生根/ 浮云白日/ 山川庄严温柔...” 这就是“具体化”的作用,你体会到了吗?

  【原则四:大纲词汇的衍生词优先】

  在高中英语中,我们已经涉及到了词根词缀的知识。运用这些知识,可以将很多高中词汇衍生为四六级词汇甚至托福、雅思词汇。如果能够熟练使用一两个这种词汇,你的作文肯定“碉堡了”!

  举例如下,看看箭头后面的替换词都是由哪些单词变来的?

  (10 )adj. 当然地

  黯然低分词:certainly

  闪光高分词:obviously 明显地;undoubtedly 毫无疑问地;evidently 显然地;

  (11 )adj. 不开心的

 黯然低分词:sad

  闪光高分词:discouraged 气馁的;depressed 沮丧的;downhearted 垂头丧气的;low-spirited 意志消沉的;

  可以看出,这里列举的“大纲词汇衍生词”看上去都相当“有水平”,但都是由大纲中的简单单词加上某些前缀、后缀变来的,可以说又好记,又好用,你学会了吗? 只要运用以上四种方法,在平时的学习中不断积累和使用“闪光高分词”,一定能让你的作文绽放出最美的光辉!

 二 、 合 理 运 用 介 词 或 名 词 短 语 、 非 谓 语 动 词 代 替 句 子 , 使 文 字 清 新 简 练

 1. 介 词 短 语 代 替 句 子

  1)

 I was pleased to hear from you and I’m writing to tell you something that has taken place in our school. (

 普 通 )

 I was pleased to hear from you and I’m writing to tell you something turned out to be.(高级)

  2)I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didn’t hear me and rode away.(普

 通 )

  After picking up the case , I shouted at The man loudly, but he rode too fast to hear me.(高级)

  3 )

 Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. ( 一 般 )

  Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable. ( 高 级 )

  4 )

 When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow. ( 一 般 )

  At the news of his death, she went pale with sorrow. (高级)

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  2. 用 替 代 词 代 替 名 词 、 句 子

  It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from the way of education of China. ( 普 通 )

  It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from that of China.(高级)

  3. 用 with+ n.+ doing/done/ 介 词 短 语

 The trees and grass disappeared and the forest became wasteland ( 普 通 )

  With the trees and grass disappearing .the forest became wasteland. ( 高 级 )

  4. 用非谓语动词代替从句 1)But later people wanted to grow crops. They began to destroy the forest ( 普 通 )

  But later in order to grow crops, people began to destroy the forest. ( 高 级 )

  2 )

 When he arrives, please give me an e- mail. ( 普 通 )

  On arriving/his arrival , please give me an e-mail. ( 高 级 )

  3 )

 She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. ( 普 通 )

  Followed by many students , she walked out of the lab. ( 高 级 )

  4 )

 If the weather permits, I"ll come tomorrow. ( 普 通 )

  I"ll come tomorrow, weather permitting . ( 高 级 )

  5 )

 He is so kind that he can help me. ( 普 通 )

  He is so kind as to help me . ( 高 级 )

  三 、 改 变 传 统 句 型 , 促 成 灵 活 表 达

  1. 改 变 句 子 开 头

  We can learn much by being brought into contact with other minds. ( 普 通 )

  By being brought into contact with other minds we can learn much. ( 高 级 )

  2. 改 变 时 态

 The bell is ringing now. ( 一 般 )

  There goes the bell! ( 高 级 )

  3. 改 变 语 态

  People suggest that the conference be put off. ( 一 般 )

  It is suggested that the conference be put off. ( 高 级 )

  4. 灵 活 使 用 强 调 句 、 被 动 句 、 倒 装 句 、 感 叹 句 、 特 殊 句 型

  使 用 倒 装 句

  By doing this, we will become a harmonious society. ( 普 通 )

  Only in this way can we become a harmonious society . ( 高 级 )

  使 用 强 调 句

  1 )

 What he said encouraged us. ( 普 通 )

  It was what he said that encouraged us. ( 高 级 )

  2 )

 Regular radio broadcasts began in 1920. ( 一 般 )

 It was not until 1920 that regular radio broadcasts began. ( 高 级 )

 5. 灵 活 使 用 各 种 主 从 复 合 句

 使 用 主 语 从 句

 1 )

 I happened to have met him. ( 一 般 )

  It happened that I had met him. ( 高 级 )

  2 )

 To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things. ( 普 通 )

  What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things. ( 高 级 )

  使 用 定 语 从 句

  1 )

 The girl is spoken highly of. Her composition was well written. ( 一 般 )

  The girl whose composition was well written is spoken highly of. ( 高 级 )

  2)So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to the environment and our health. (

 普 通 )

  So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air, which is harmful to the environment and our health. ( 高 级 )

  3)There was a thick forest on the hill. A great diversity of animals and birds live there. (普通 )

  There was a thick forest on the hill, where a great diversity of animals and birds live.(高级)

  使 用 状 语 从 句

  1 )

 I won’t believe what he says. ( 一 般 )

  No matter what he says , I won’t believe. ( 高 级 )

  2)

 I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didn’t hear me and rode away.(普通 )

 Loudly as I shouted at him after picking it up, the man was riding so far away that he couldn’t hear me. ( 高 级 )

  使用并列句 1)

 If you go through the gate, you’ll find the entrance to Bear Country. (一般)

  Go through the gate , and you’ll find the entrance to Bear Country. ( 高 级 )

  2)

 I was walking aimlessly through the street. At that time, I saw a fruit shop. (普通)

  I was walking aimlessly through the street when I saw a fruit shop. ( 高 级 )

  使 用 虚 拟 语 气

  The ship didn’t sink with all on board because there were the efforts of the captain. (一般)

  But for the efforts of the captain, the ship would have sunk with all on board. (高级)

  综 合 使 用

  Suddenly, I had an idea. I stopped a taxi to catch up with the man. I caught up with him at last.( 普 通 )

 I was wondering what I should do when an idea suddenly struck me. I stopped a taxi as quickly as I could so as to catch up with the man. ( 高 级 )

  四 、 有 效 使 用 语 句 间 的 连 接 成 分 , 使 文 章 结 构 紧 凑 , 思 路 清 晰 , 过 渡 自 然

  Some students think that our school should play music during break time.

  Music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Music provides us with relaxation, which reduces the tiredness. And listening to music also makes us feel comfortable. ( 普 通 )

  Some students think that our school should play music during break time. To begin with , music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Furthermore , music provides us with relaxation, which reduces the tiredness. Last but not the least, listening to music also makes us feel comfortable.(高级 )

  五、使用不同结构、不同长度的句子,尽量使句型多样化,避免单调乏味的表达方式

  There is a new classroom building on one side of the road. There used to be a layground on the other side. But there is a library now. There are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines in the library. There is a new playground in the front of the school. There are a lot of trees in and around our school. ( 普 通 )

  On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, where the

 playground used to be , now stands another new building-- our library, in which you can find all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in the front of the school. We have also have planted a lot of trees in and around the school. ( 高 级 )

  高 考 写 作 中 常 用 的 过 渡 性 词 语

 1. 表 并 列 补 充

 what is more, besides, also, as well, moreover, furthermore, in addition, what’s worse, worse still…

  2. 表 转 折

 、 对 比

 but, however, yet, instead, on the other hand, on the contrary, although, different from, in contrast to, compared with, despite, in spite of, unlike, years ago…today, the former… the latter, then…now, once…now, on one hand…on the other hand, some…others...

  3. 表 因 果

 since, as, because (of), for, so, thus, therefore, as a result (of), as a consequence , consequently ,

 so that…

  4. 表 条 件

  if, on condition ( that )

 , as long as, unless, or else…

  5. 表 顺 序

 above all, first of all, firstly, first, second(ly), the next, finally, in the end, at last…

  6. 表 时 间

 when, after, before, until, as soon as, later, afterwards, soon, lately, recently, since, from then on, in the meantime, then, suddenly, at the same time, next, early this morning/year/century, now, after, presently, later, somewhat later, finally, at last, all of a sudden…

  7. 表 同 位

 in other words, that is to say, that is, namely, to put it another way…

  8. 表 相 似 或 相 同

  in the same way, like, similarly,…

  9.表目的

 for/with this purpose, for the sake of, in order to, so as to, so that, in order that…

 10.表过渡

  as for, as to, speaking of, considering(鉴于), with regard to(关于), considering ( 关 于 )

  11. 表 观 点

  I think/believe, as far as I know, personally, in one’s view, in one’s opinion,…

  12. 表 进 行 举 例 说 明

  for instance, for example, like, such as, take… for example,…

  13. 表 陈 述 事 实

  in fact, actually, as a matter of fact, to tell you the truth…

  14. 表 总 结

  on the whole, in short, all in all, in a word, in conclusion, in summary, to sum up, all things considered…

  随 堂 演 练

 假如你叫李华,你的家乡原来有座茂密的森林,但现在已变成了荒漠。请根据下面几幅图的内容,向一家英文报社写一篇“Protecting The Forest”的短文。注意:1. 词数 100 左右;

  2. 开 头 已 为 你 写 好

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 Protecting The Forest

  My hometown used to be a beautiful place.

 内 容 要 点 :

  1 、 家 乡 原 来 青 山 绿 水 , 很 美 。

 2 、 人 们 毁 林 种 庄 稼 , 过 度 放 牧 , 造 成 水 土 流 失 、 土 地 荒 漠 化 。

  3 、 发 表 你 的 看 法 。

 分 析 下 面 学 生 习 作 , 找 出 问 题 , 并 修 改 。

 (1)

 Some years ago, my hometown used to be a beautiful place. There is a forest on the hill. Many animals and birds lived there. But later people wanted to plant crops. They began to destroy the forest. They also feeded their crows and sheep on the grass. The trees and grass disappeared. And the forest became wasteland.

 So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to be environment and our health.

 In our opinion, people should be punished for the bad result. We must ask the public to protect the environment. If every of us take action, we can live better.

  【 分 析 】

  【 修 改 】

  如 何 增 加 文 章 的 亮 点

  一.适当地多使用一些词组、习语或高级词汇代替普通单词,以增加文采,丰富文章的表现 力

  1. To tell you the truth, I don’t really like your new novel. ( 普 通 )

  To tell you the truth, I really _________________your new novel. ( 高 级 )

 2. A new building is being built in my hometown. ( 普 通 )

  A new building_____________________. ( 高 级 )

  二 . 合 理 运 用 介 词 或 名 词 短 语 、 非 谓 语 动 词 代 替 句 子 , 使 文 字 清 新 简 练

  1. 介 词 短 语 代 替 句 子

  1)

 I was pleased to hear from you and I’m writing to tell you something that has taken place in our school. (

 普 通 )

  I was pleased to hear from you and I’m writing to tell you something ______________.(高级)

  2)I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didn’t hear me and rode away. (普通 )

  ______, I shouted at the man loudly, but he rode too fast to hear me. ( 高 级 )

  2. 用 替 代 词 代 替 名 词

  It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from the way of education of China. ( 普 通 )

  It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from______ of China.(高级 )

  3. 用 with+ n.+ doing/done/ 介 词 短 语

 The trees and grass disappeared and the forest became wasteland ( 普 通 )

 __________________________________, the forest became wasteland. ( 高 级 )

  4. 用非谓语动词代替从句 1)

 But later people wanted to grow crops. They began to destroy the forest ( 普 通 )

 But later_____________________, people began to destroy the forest. ( 高 级 )

  2 )

 When he arrives, please give me an e- mail. ( 普 通 )

 On_________________, please give me an e-mail. ( 高 级 )

  3 )

 She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. ( 普 通 )

 ___________________________, she walked out of the lab. ( 高 级 )

  4 )

 If the weather permits, I"ll come tomorrow. ( 普 通 )

 I"ll come tomorrow, ___________________. ( 高 级 )

  5 )

 He is so kind that he can help me. ( 普 通 )

 He is so kind_________________. ( 高 级 )

  三 . 改 变 传 统 句 型 , 促 成 灵 活 表 达

  1. 改 变 句 子 开 头

 We can learn much by being brought into contact with other minds. ( 普 通 )

  _____________________________________ we can learn much. ( 高 级 )

 2. 灵 活 使 用 强 调 句 、 被 动 句 、 倒 装 句 、 感 叹 句 和 it 句 型

  1 )

 What he said encouraged us. ( 普 通 )

 __________________________________. ( 高 级 )

  2 )

 By doing this, we will become a harmonious society. ( 普 通 )

 ___________________________________________. ( 高 级 )

  3 )

 People suggest that the conference be put off. ( 普 通 )

 _________________________________________ ( 高 级 )

  3. 灵 活 使 用 各 种 主 从 复 合 句

  1)So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to the environment and our health. (

 普 通 )

 So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air, ___________________. (高级 )

  2)There was a thick forest on the hill. A great diversity of animals and birds live there. (普通 )

 There was a thick forest on the hill, ____________________________. ( 高 级 )

  3)I was walking aimlessly through the street. At that time, I saw a fruit shop. (普通)

 I was walking aimlessly through the street _____________________ ( 高 级 )

  4 )

 To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things. ( 普 通 )

 ____________________is that the little girl knows so many things. ( 高 级 )

  5 )

 I won"t believe what he says. ( 普 通 )

 _____________________________, I won"t believe. ( 高 级 )

  6)

 I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didn’t hear me and rode away. (普通 )

 I shouted at him picking it up, the man was riding so far away . ( 高 级 )

  7)Suddenly, I had an idea. I stopped a taxi to catch up with the man. I caught up with him at last. ( 普 通 )

 I was wondering what I should do . I stopped a taxi so as to catch up with the man.(高级)

  四 . 有 效 使 用 语 句 间 的 连 接 成 分 , 使 文 章 结 构 紧 凑 , 思 路 清 晰 , 过 渡 自 然

  Some students think that our school should play music during break time. Music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Music provides us with relaxation, which reduces the tiredness. And listening to music also makes us feel comfortable. (

 普 通 )

  Some students think that our school should play music during break time. ______________, music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Furthermore, music provides us with relaxation, which reduces the tiredness._______________, listening to music also makes us feel comfortable.

 ( 高 级 )

  五.使用不同结构、不同长度的句子,尽量使句型多样化,避免单调乏味的表达方式

  There is a new classroom building on one side of the road. There used to be a playground on the other side. But there is a library now. There are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines in the library. There is a new playground in the front of the school. There are a lot of trees in and around our school. ( 普 通 )

  On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, _____________, now stands another new building-- our library, _____________________all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in the front of the school. _______________a lot of trees in and around the school. ( 高 级 )

  (1)Some years ago, my hometown used to be a beautiful place. There is a forest on the hill. Many animals and birds lived there. But later people wanted to plant crops. They began to destroy the forest. They also feeded their crows and sheep on the grass. The trees and grass disappeared. And the forest became wasteland.

 So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to be environment

 and our health.

 In our opinion, people should be punished for the bad result. We must ask the public to protect the environment. If every of us take action, we can live better.

  【分析】

  该篇文章段落清晰,但准确性较差,主要体现在语法错误较多,另外,也缺乏 生 动 性 , 读 起 来 毫 无 生 气 。

  【 修 改 1 】

 Some years ago, my hometown used to be a beautiful place. There is (was)

 a forest on the hill. Many ( A variety of/ A great diversity of )

 animals and birds lived there. But later people wanted to plant (grow)

 crops. They began to destroy the forest. They also feeded ( fed )

 their crows ( cattle )

 and sheep on the grass. The trees and grass disappeared (gradually). And the

  forest became wasteland.

  So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to be environment and our health.

  In our opinion, people should be punished for the bad result. We must ask (call on/ appeal to )the public to protect the environment. If every of ( each of/every one of )us take (takes)

 action, we can live better.( improve our living conditions and live in harmony with society)

  【分析】

 该篇语句通顺,无语法错误,使用了个别短语(A variety of/ a great diversity of, call on/ appeal to 和修饰语(gradually),使文章略显生动,但文章连贯性、紧凑性较差,缺乏恰 当 的 连 接 词 .

  【 修 改 2 】

 My hometown used to be a beautiful place. Green trees and grass could be seen all over the hills. Some years later/But later, people began to destroy the forest to grow more crops. Besides, they cut down the trees or burned them. They let their cattle and sheep eat the grass on the ground. The trees and grass disappeared faster and faster. At last, the forest turned into a wasteland.

  As a result /As a consequence, when it rains, the soil is washed down the hills and into the rivers. What’s more, winds blow away the soil in the fields. People can’t grow crops or feed their animals on the land.

 In my opinion, we shouldn’t develop our economy in this way: destroying the forests and breaking the balance of nature. I hope all the people will take good care of the forests and plant more trees. By doing this, we will become a harmonious society.

 【分析】

  该篇语句通顺, 较恰当地使用了连接词,结构清晰,但句式较为简单,修饰语 较 少 , 使 文 章 显 得 较 为 平 淡 。

  【修改 3】

 My hometown used to be a beautiful place. Green trees and grass could be seen all over

  the hills. As time went on/ With time going on, people began to destroy the forest to grow more crops, cutting down the trees or burning them. What’s more, they cut down the trees or burned them. They let their cattle and sheep eat the grass on the ground.

 Gradually, with the trees and grass disappearing faster and faster, the forest turned into a wasteland.

 As a result /As a consequence, when it rains, the soil is washed down the hills and into the rivers. Worse still, strong /heavy / fierce/violent winds blow away the soil in the fields. People can’t grow crops or feed their animals on the poor/ barren land.

 As far as I am concerned, we shouldn’t develop or economy by destroying the forest and breaking the balance of nature. I appeal to all the people to take good care of the forests and plant more trees. Only in this way can we become a harmonious society.

 【分析】

  该篇语言流畅,连接词和过渡词使用恰当;层次分明,结构连贯、紧凑,同时合理运用了一些修饰语(strong/heavy/fierce/violent winds,poor/ barren land、较高级的词汇(appeal to, As far as I am concerned)和复杂句式(As time went on/With time going on,… cutting down…,…with the trees and grass disappearing…, Only in this way can we become… )使语 言 更 加 丰 富 、 生 动 , 是 一 篇 较 优 秀 的 文 章 。

  书 面 表 达 七 大 禁 忌

 1 、 白 板 一 片 , 众 人 皆 知

 2 、 偷 天 换 日 , 蒙 混 过 关

 3 、 逐 句 翻 译 , 句 不 成 文

 4 、 胡 编 乱 造 , 生 搬 硬 套

 5 、 语 言 简 单 , 句 式 单 一

 6 、 误 解 题 意 , 离 题 甚 远

 7、内容无挑,卷面欠雅 【全国各地高考英语作文统一评分标准 + 答题技巧 + 答题方法】

 1. 本题总分为 25 分,按 5 个档次给分。

 2. 评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。

 3. 词数少于 80 和多于 120的,从总分中减去 2 分。

 4. 评分时,应注意的主要内容为:内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。

 5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面,评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受。

 6. 如书写较差,以至影响交际,将分数降低一个档次。

 7. 内容要点可用不同方式表达,对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。

 【各档次的给分范围和要求】

 第五档(很好);(21-25 分) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。

 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。

 4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误,但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。

 5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。

 第四档(好):(16-20 分) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

 2. 虽漏掉 1、2 个次重点,但覆盖所有主要内容。

 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

 4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确,些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。

 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

 6. 达到了预期的写作目的。

 第三档(适当):(11-15 分) 1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。

 2. 虽漏掉一些内容,但覆盖所有主要内容。

 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

 4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,但不影响理解。

 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。

 6. 整体而言,基本达到了预期的写作目的。

 第二档(较差):(6-10 分) 1. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

 2. 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容,写了一些无关内容。

 3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

 4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解。

 5. 较少使用语句间的连接成分,内容缺少连贯性。

 6. 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。

 第一档(差):(1-5 分)

 1. 未完成试题规定的任务。

 2. 明显遗漏主要内容,写了一些无关内容,原因可能是未理解试题要求。

 3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

 4. 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响对写作内容的理解。

 5. 缺乏语句间的连接成分,内容不连贯。

 6. 信息未能传达给读者。

 不得分:(0 分)

 未能传达给读者仟何信息:内容太少,无法评判;写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。

 【作文答题技巧、解题方法】

 写作短文时,要注意审题,对写什么和怎么写必须有一个清晰的思路。很多考生动笔就写,错了以后再涂改,严重影响卷面整洁,也影响了成绩;其次要在遣词造句上多下功夫。尽可能运用较熟悉的词组、短语或成语;第三要力求变换各种句式,当然,也不能片面追求花哨文字,拼凑错误百出的句子,使成绩大打折扣;行文连贯是阅卷教师比较看重的一个方面。要有好的开头和好的结尾;为了使文章结构严密,增强说服力和感染力,考生应该在句与句之间,恰当地使用一些过渡性词语。

 另外,考生很容易出现句与句之间不使用连接词的错误,这是英语写作中的大忌。

 最后,考生应该把写完的作文阅读两遍,认真检查是否有拼写方面的错误,是否有时态、语态方面的错误,是否存在中式英语等等。

 【作文答题技巧、答题方法】

 1、仔细审题,弄清大意。审题是写作的关键所在,仔细审题才能深刻理解题目所要表达的主要意思。不论是汉语提示写作还是看图写作,都要仔细审题,弄清写作内容,如背景、人物、时间、体裁等的要求。

 2、编拟提纲,拟出要点。在弄清了题目所要表达的主要意思后,便可根据主要内容列出提纲,即整理出内容要点。理清要点的目的就是为了把握短文的脉络,不至于遗漏内容的要点。

 3、紧扣要点,扩写成文。在列出要点后,依据要点扩写成文。扩写时,可运用想象适度发挥。但切记不可随意乱写,要紧扣画面或汉语提示,适当描述,连贯通顺即可,不能把汉语提示全部译成英语。

 4、反复检查,修正错误。扩写成文后,考生应将扩写后的文章认真读一读,检查是否有错误。在检查时,着重看短文是否扣住了提示或图画的内容,要点是否有遗漏。同时,还要注意有无语法错误,如时态、人称等,是否符合文体特点、格式等等。

 5、写作,要注意留够时间,一般需要 20 分钟。最好能打草稿,这样可以减少错误,书写也比较清晰工整。作文注意内容要点要全,语言要通顺。提倡用小词小句来写,适当用复杂结构。

 书面表达思维拓展:一句多译练习

 例一 . 写请假条。情景:

 我生病了,明天不能上学。

 I’m ill. I can’t go to school tomorrow. (太简单!句子松散) Why can’t I go to school tomorrow? Because I’m ill!(疑问句)

 I’m ill and I can’t go to school tomorrow.(并列句)

 I’ll be absent from school tomorrow just because I’m ill. I’m so seriously ill that I can’t go to school tomorrow.(so….that 句型) I can’t go to school tomorrow because I’m ill.(表原因的复合句) I can’t go to school tomorrow because of illness.(用 Owing to 或者 due to)

 Owing to illness, I can’t go to school tomorrow. I can’t go to school tomorrow

 due to illness, My absence from school tomorrow is due to my illness. I can’t go to school tomorrow on account of illness.(用介词短语)

 I’m ill so I can’t go to school tomorrow.(用 so、thus或者 therefore 等)

 I’m ill, as a result, I can’t go to school tomorrow. I can’t go to school tomorrow as a result of my illness. Being ill, I can’t go to school tomorrow.(用分词作原因状语) I can’t go to school tomorrow. That’s because I’m ill.(用表语从句)

 I’m ill. That’s why I can’t go to school tomorrow. (用表语从句)

 I can’t go to school tomorrow. The reason is that I’m ill. (用表语从句)

 I’m seriously ill, which makes me unable to go to school. (用定语从句)

 I’m seriously ill, which makes it impossible for me to go to school. I’m seriously ill, thus making it for me go to school.(用分词作结果状语)

 How I wish I could go to school tomorrow! But I can’t because I’m seriously ill.(用虚拟语气) I’m ill. That’s the reason why I can’t go to school tomorrow. (用定语从句)

 It is because I’m ill that I can’t go to school tomorrow.(强调句型)

 The reason for my absence from school tomorrow is that I’m ill. (用表语从句)

 What I want to tell you is that I’m ill and I can’t go school tomorrow .(用主语从句、表语从句、并列句) My illness prevents me from going to school tomorrow. I have disease, which prevents me from going to school tomorrow.

  例二.

 他说英语太快了!让我大吃一惊!

  1. He speaks English so fast, and I am surprised.

  2. He speaks English so fast and it is surprising to me.

  3. He speaks English so fast and it is a surprise to me.

  4. He speaks English so fast, at which I am surprised.

  5. He speaks English so fast, which is a surprise to me.

  6. He speaks English so fast, which is surprising to me.

  7. He speaks English so fast, which makes me surprised.

  8. He speaks English so fast that I am surprised.

  9. So fast does he speak English that I am surprised.

  10. So fast does he speak English that it surprises me.

  11. His fast English speaking is surprising to me.

  12. His fast English speaking is a surprise to me.

  13. His fast English speaking makes me surprised.

  14. His fast English speaking surprises me.

  15. How fast he speaks English, which is surprising to me.

  16. How fast he speaks English, which is a surprise to me.

  17. How fast he speaks English, and it is a surprise to me.

  18. How fast he speaks English, and it is surprising to me.

  19. What a fast English speaker he is! It does surprise me.

  20. It is he who speaks English so fast, which surprises me.

  21. It is his fast English speaking that surprises me.

  22. That he speaks English so fast is surprising to me.

  23. That he speaks English so fast surprises me.

  24. That he speaks English so fast is a surprise to me.

  25. I am surprised that he speaks English so fast.

  26. I am surprised that he speaks such fast English.

  27. I am surprised that he speaks English with fast speed.

  28. I am surprised by his fast English speaking.

  29. I am surprised by his English speaking with fast speed.

  30. It is surprising to me that he (should)speak English so fast.

  31. It is surprising to me that he (should)speak such fast English.

 32. It is surprising to me that he (should)speak English with fast

 speed.

  33. It is surprising to me that his spoken English is so fast.

  34. It is a surprise to me that he (should)speak English so fast.

  35. To my surprise, he speaks English so fast.

  36. To my surprise, he speaks such fast English.

  37. To my surprise, he speaks English with fast speed.

  38. To my surprise, his spoken English is so fast.

  39. When he speaks fast English, I am surprised.

  40. When he speaks English fast, I am surprised.

 例三. 2002 年普通高等学校招生全国英语统一考试书面表达试题 最近,你校同学正在参加某英文报组织的一场讨论。讨论的主题是:公园要不要收门票?请你根据下表提供的信息,给报社写一封信,客观地介绍讨论情况。

 60%的同学认为 1、不应收门票 2、公园是公众休闲的地方 3 、 如 收 票 , 需 建 大 门 、 围 墙 , 会 影 响 城 市 形 象

 40% 的 同 学 认 为 1、应收门票,但票价不宜高 2、支付园林工人工资 3 、 购 新 花 木 注意:

 1、信的开头已为你写好。

 2、词数:100 左右。

 3、参考词汇:门票:entrance fee

 1.60%的同学认为公园不应该收费。

  Sixty percent of the students think that the park should not charge

 entrance fees.

 =Sixty in/out of one hundred students hold the view that entrance fees

 should not be charged for parks.

 =Three fifths of the students believe(suppose、think )that a park should be

 free of charge.

 =Three in/out of...

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